Since we are not meeting this month, I'll just leave my comments here.
Our first gun fight! Now we've got ourselves a Western (insert the sound of someone spitting chew and it hitting a metal spittoon here).
The action is quick and decisive in this chapter. Things are happening fast. I like that we get a bit more of LeRoy's backstory as well. I'm wondering if the first part of the chapter could be fleshed out a bit more. It seems that LeRoy is able to jump pretty quickly to some conclusions about the gun sales and the missing townsfolk. Maybe some inner dialogue to help us catch up with his deductions?
Looking forward to see what happens in the next chapter to Thomas.
Holli,
Since we are not meeting this month, I'll just leave my comments here.
Our first gun fight! Now we've got ourselves a Western (insert the sound of someone spitting chew and it hitting a metal spittoon here).
The action is quick and decisive in this chapter. Things are happening fast. I like that we get a bit more of LeRoy's backstory as well. I'm wondering if the first part of the chapter could be fleshed out a bit more. It seems that LeRoy is able to jump pretty quickly to some conclusions about the gun sales and the missing townsfolk. Maybe some inner dialogue to help us catch up with his deductions?
Looking forward to see what happens in the next chapter to Thomas.
Nate